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DhdfhD

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The Beijing Olympics will bring improvement to the Chinese economy in the areas of employment, tourism, and trade. For example, employment has increased in downtown Beijing since the Beijing Olympic Committee built Bird Nest Stadium, the Water Cube, and other Olympic stadiums in preparation for the Olympic crowds. Then, there are less unemployed people, which leads China to move one step higher in the Gross Domestic Products. Tourism before and during the games will increase demand for local goods and services. Economic impacts on the Beijing economy may persist as positive perceptions and good will created during the games may result in more tourism and increased global trade for China, and local Chinese will continue to use facilities and infrastructure created for the Olympics. An example of the marketing benefits of hosting the Olympics is evidenced by the recent sales of mascots offered at local family restaurants. Also, as tourists visit Beijing, they will spend money at transportation systems, hotels, and ticket sales. The Beijing Olympics, thus, will greatly improve the Chinese economy.<br />
 

xxkris09

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Just make it simple!

The Beijiing Olympics will not only improve Chinese economy, but also the tourism and trade within it.
 
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