Story on the sims2??

[Freshman-0809]

ok, I just uploaded my techinal first story on the sims 2 exchange online. if anyone could read it and give me some constructive criticism?<br />
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http//thesims2.ea.com/exchange/story_de...<br />
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heres the link.<br />
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http//thesims2.ea.com/exchange/story_detail.php?asset_id=235397<br />
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ok that should work.<br />

 

[LannaL]

page not found.
fanciful

 

[7331]

Some parts were sort of random. Though I have never written a legacy thing so I don't really know how they work. But it was entertaining and you're really funny.
Good luck!
=]

P.S. Twilght rocks my socks.

 

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